Joined: 28 May 2002 Posts: 1878 Location: Nashville TN
Posted: Fri May 27, 2005 7:08 am Post subject:
Ah, but you got to remember, Bloodlust is initially charming, VERY handsome....if there was ever an MM movie, Brad Pitt would make a very good Bloodlust---and generally hid his more reprehensible acts from other mercenaries, who REGARDED HIM AS A HERO, more or less. A sort of uber-mercenary.
Remember, LORELEI was practically in heat for him when she first met him. True?
Now, think about the circles Sarah must travel in. She has more guns than Nick Fury. She must hit the mercenary shows all the time. She's used to being misunderstood as a mercenary. So wouldn't she think that most of the "rumors" about Bloodlust weren't true?
No question if Sarah found out how much a CREEP Bloodlust really is, she would be first in line to blow his brains out. I just think Bloodlust would be a little sly, and not quick to show that side of himself to a uzi-toting sharpshooter like Sarah!
And that MM really has NO points of contact with Sarah---and Bloodlust did.---Al _________________ Al Schroeder.
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Ah but I've got first dibs. Bloodlust kills a mentally challeneged person, Chooken fights for the minorties... Chooken is gunna own him someday, maybe he can get gregor to make him a catwalk, he can pick up SZ on the way. _________________ Chooken
Joined: 28 May 2002 Posts: 1878 Location: Nashville TN
Posted: Fri May 27, 2005 8:25 am Post subject:
Maybe I should do a shooting gallery section of the fan art, where various people can kill Bloodlust in various ways...
And remember, MM still has dibs on him, too. As you'll see, Stef, she makes the most chilling threat she EVER made to Bloodlust, later in that same storyline.
---Al
PS. If it's any consolation, I can imagine MM being in, say, Lex Luthor's or Doc Doom's workshop and going, "I totally hate everything you stand for---but some of this technology isn't half-bad. What does THIS do, for instance?" _________________ Al Schroeder.
comic: http://mindmistress.keenspace.com
The greatest super power of all.
Also check out Flickerflame :
http://www.webcomicsnation.com/alschroeder/flickerflame/series.php
Excellent, since there's so many people who wanna beat the shit out of him, we should just re-enact the soap in the sock scene from full metal jacket! That'll learn 'im. _________________ Chooken
Joined: 28 May 2002 Posts: 1878 Location: Nashville TN
Posted: Wed Jun 01, 2005 9:01 am Post subject:
Just between you and me, I'm not sure WHAT MM had in mind for Bloodlust. I'm not sure that SHE's picked something that satisfies her. I do know that MM, although generally helpful, can be quite merciless when she's really p.o.ed.
Well it's the same for alot of us. You'll soon see there's a character in Chooken who does things a bit too extreme and even Chooken doesn't like him (he's a good guy). Same with others, instead of being able to fight well for no reason, Donn WANTS to fight but realistically she's not very tough. So there's boundaries for all of us really, if our comics work well the characters write themselves and you'll often stop and question whether or not something will work and if it doesn't work, it sticks out like a sore thumb for the character. _________________ Chooken
Evidently so do alot of people, but fear not as he does have a nice big role to play in part one, but he's not really the main focus due to the large amount of characters soon to come into it. _________________ Chooken
The Art I'm gonna try and give you a bunch of Constructive Criticism here. This is actually the second review I've done of Mindmistress and previously I criticized the art as being a weaker facet of Mindmistress. I think that's still essentially true, however, Al is definitely making moves to rectify any problems. The skill he shows in the latest updates are head and shoulders above the way he began. Most of the time now, his proportions are accurate enough and his character designs interesting. One of the pleasures of looking at webcomics (done by amateur artists) is following the progress and improvement that occurs.
However, I do have a few issues to bring up about the art. The quality of the lines used are rather poor. At times they just seem too thin and come across as confusing scribbles. While the line style isn't too bothersome in most panels, in some it stands out as far too scribbly. As a less than spectacular inker myself, I realize line quality is tough to deal with. Keep plugging away.
Second. The coloring could use a bit more sophistication. At times, the shading you do looks pretty decent and conveys light and form nicely, but at other times looks rather blobby-photoshop-paintbrush-tool-like. Maybe use a fuzzier brush to get a little more subtlety. (I'm assuming you're using PS) I can try and clarify if my description is a little too imprecise.
The Website The website is functional and easy to navigate. However, it's not very attractive to the eye. I think you could jazz it up with some fancy buttons and a nifty color scheme (I don't like the blue. ). I wish I could say site design isn't really important, but it is.
The WritingMy favorite part of Mindmistress and the thing which keeps me coming back the most. Al knows how to write superhero comics. He writes "gee-whiz comics." I call it that because his work is reminiscent of the old swashbuckling comics of the past. Flash Gordon and old-school Fantastic Four come to mind when reading MM. As I read, I just feel like saying "Gee-whiz, what world will we discover today?" or "What cool inventions will I see this issue?" That's a kind of enthusiasm I find missing from today's comics. There's no sense of adventure today. In order to get that feeling we need to look to older comics--or apparently Mindmistress. For that accomplishment, I say bravo.
My favorite storyline is still "Brain Storm." Though "Concentrating Forcefully" is now my second favorite, with Forceful being my favorite character. Your weakest storyline is "It's Just your Imagination," but I don't think I can call anything you've written bad, per se. It's just that the device with clicking the eye became tedious very quickly. It's interesting to create non-linear aspects to your comic, and it made me wonder if anyone considered creating a "choose your own adventure" comic. It'd work well with hypertext.
I suppose my only advice is to give MM more interesting supporting characters. Not because she lacks them, but because I want more! Also, more discovering other worlds and creatures. Secret Bases are cool too. I like the Man Mountain. I'm looking forward to the return of Dylan Steed!
Joined: 28 May 2002 Posts: 1878 Location: Nashville TN
Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2005 5:32 am Post subject:
Vulkar wrote:
However, I do have a few issues to bring up about the art. The quality of the lines used are rather poor. At times they just seem too thin and come across as confusing scribbles. While the line style isn't too bothersome in most panels, in some it stands out as far too scribbly. As a less than spectacular inker myself, I realize line quality is tough to deal with. Keep plugging away.
Second. The coloring could use a bit more sophistication. At times, the shading you do looks pretty decent and conveys light and form nicely, but at other times looks rather blobby-photoshop-paintbrush-tool-like. Maybe use a fuzzier brush to get a little more subtlety. (I'm assuming you're using PS) I can try and clarify if my description is a little too imprecise.
The Website The website is functional and easy to navigate. However, it's not very attractive to the eye. I think you could jazz it up with some fancy buttons and a nifty color scheme (I don't like the blue. ). I wish I could say site design isn't really important, but it is.
I am indeed using PSP. I've got a little problem with inking, however, in that Eric, at least for a while, was breaking open pens and "fingerpainting" with the ink. So finally I said to heck with inking and have been doing it directly from the pencilled line art. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't, so that if the lines are sometimes too thin and "sketchy", that's why. (Eric's one of two sons I've had who's autistic.)
Hmmm. Maybe I could ink at work, during one of my breaks...?
Coloring advice noted. I'll work on it.
Website design I can handle. I was trying to keep it simple, but evidently I've overdone it. I'll work on that one.
Vulkar wrote:
The WritingMy favorite part of Mindmistress and the thing which keeps me coming back the most. Al knows how to write superhero comics. He writes "gee-whiz comics." I call it that because his work is reminiscent of the old swashbuckling comics of the past. Flash Gordon and old-school Fantastic Four come to mind when reading MM. As I read, I just feel like saying "Gee-whiz, what world will we discover today?" or "What cool inventions will I see this issue?" That's a kind of enthusiasm I find missing from today's comics. There's no sense of adventure today. In order to get that feeling we need to look to older comics--or apparently Mindmistress. For that accomplishment, I say bravo.
My favorite storyline is still "Brain Storm." Though "Concentrating Forcefully" is now my second favorite, with Forceful being my favorite character. Your weakest storyline is "It's Just your Imagination," but I don't think I can call anything you've written bad, per se. It's just that the device with clicking the eye became tedious very quickly. It's interesting to create non-linear aspects to your comic, and it made me wonder if anyone considered creating a "choose your own adventure" comic. It'd work well with hypertext.
I suppose my only advice is to give MM more interesting supporting characters. Not because she lacks them, but because I want more! Also, more discovering other worlds and creatures. Secret Bases are cool too. I like the Man Mountain. I'm looking forward to the return of Dylan Steed!
Keep up the good work!
Thanks! Yeah, I'm a BIG fan of the early Lee/Kirby Fantastic Four, where every single issue Kirby and Lee (note how I'm reversing the order there, since I think Kirby was more the ideasmith than Lee) would introduce to new concepts and new worlds. To a lesser extent other comics did it too---I remember one summer buying the first "Crisis on Earth-One/Earth-TWo" by Fox and being blown away. Comics today just keep on masturbating to concepts introduced in the sixties, and I yearn to see new stuff....to have the old "sense of wonder" kick in, the sense of "wowwww" that Larry Niven's RINGWORLD gave me...
So I decided to do it myself.
Appreciate the review! I was busy this weekend, so didn't check the forum until now....expect to be quoted at the top of the page, and be linked on a "reviews" page that I'll probably put up Wednesday.---Al _________________ Al Schroeder.
comic: http://mindmistress.keenspace.com
The greatest super power of all.
Also check out Flickerflame :
http://www.webcomicsnation.com/alschroeder/flickerflame/series.php
I've got a little problem with inking, however, in that Eric, at least for a while, was breaking open pens and "fingerpainting" with the ink.
Oh yeah. I forgot to mention the sharing of your own experiences in your newsbox in this child-wandering-off storyline is quite touching. Thanks for sharing. It adds to the story to know where some of your ideas come from. _________________
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